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Dear Ian,

Your project is too good. But for the continuity of the poem, I wish there should be a theme guiding the same. Broad outlines on how the poem should flow may be mentioned. People may be given a chance of writing many lines, may be a few stanzas to add, as per their wish, as with the type of flow of the poem we have here, I think two lines are tooooooo small to say something artistic.

I have another idea for a new thread for such group activity.

Just give a broken theme, loosely packed, and invite poetic expressions in about 10 to 20 lines. This will greatly enhance focussed thinking, in addition to bringing various colours of poetry on a single theme.

Others too may comment....

S. Venkateswarlu

venkat_2211 wrote:

Dear Ian,

Your project is too good. But for the continuity of the poem, I wish there should be a theme guiding the same. Broad outlines on how the poem should flow may be mentioned. People may be given a chance of writing many lines, may be a few stanzas to add, as per their wish, as with the type of flow of the poem we have here, I think two lines are tooooooo small to say something artistic.

I have another idea for a new thread for such group activity.

Just give a broken theme, loosely packed, and invite poetic expressions in about 10 to 20 lines. This will greatly enhance focussed thinking, in addition to bringing various colours of poetry on a single theme.

Others too may comment....

S. Venkateswarlu

That is a very good idea Perhaps you would like to initiate the thread

Yes I do agree that two lines aren't really enough to express yourself well.

I friend and I some times write poems together..
The first initiates a poem..then the second takes inspiration from it and joins it in the middle then continues it with his own lines.
And so on..always joining the poem around the middle of the person before, taking inspiration and moving it forward.

Maybe it's something we could do in the future Ian.

KarenH-H

Karen H-H wrote:

Yes I do agree that two lines aren't really enough to express yourself well.

I friend and I some times write poems together..
The first initiates a poem..then the second takes inspiration from it and joins it in the middle then continues it with his own lines.
And so on..always joining the poem around the middle of the person before, taking inspiration and moving it forward.

Maybe it's something we could do in the future Ian.

KarenH-H

All excellent Ideas but remember this forum is yours so you can initiate these things any time you wish and I will support all efforts and look forwards to reading and enjoying such collaborations

The young paint age and the old paint youth
On both their faces speaks no truth

Bewildered about the rudderless ness of people
I see with astonishment how they still can walk through sunbeams of life Buddharowi

that shine so bright as to blind them,
they stumble through randomly, not seeing.... not seeing what was

venkat_2211 wrote:

Dear Ian,

Your project is too good. But for the continuity of the poem, I wish there should be a theme guiding the same. Broad outlines on how the poem should flow may be mentioned. People may be given a chance of writing many lines, may be a few stanzas to add, as per their wish, as with the type of flow of the poem we have here, I think two lines are tooooooo small to say something artistic.

I have another idea for a new thread for such group activity.

Just give a broken theme, loosely packed, and invite poetic expressions in about 10 to 20 lines. This will greatly enhance focussed thinking, in addition to bringing various colours of poetry on a single theme.

Others too may comment....

S. Venkateswarlu

two lines is nice and snappy I find it ok, but we should try to take on board the previous lines and make it organicaly grow where it will......
I love this thread!
If you do start one with more lines tho' I'll well be on there too.
brilliant suggestions
jx

dizzied memory last night
i see you in my dreams
for me its a reality

in it flower bloom
but murder by thes thorn i was
ignoring the pain
i was stupify by love

listening to the music turns
to be a misery that sounds makes me alone

With my thoughts and fears.
Depression and tears.
Dreams, then nightmares.
No one cares.
Loneliness aches.
My soul it takes.
Need to break free.
From the pains of misery.(KarenH-H)

and go back to the plains of hope
Ive seen it before when my mind evoked
creations in my sleep that ran so deep
it manifested a smile onto my... teary face
such a sweet ecsape from this dreary place
of mine that my life has developed
trapped in the depression that enstrangles my mind
But I know it will get better when embellished in time... (Bigmayne)

a bolt of lightning hit me then,
I thought redemption received me at once
smiling at my door there stood with pink hands,
the big eyed child hoping for some fun!

Like a bolt from the blue
The reality broke into me!

My senses befooled mine
My eyes beheld the unreal.

As a child i watched the stars
with a will and wonder to join them

I am most impressed with the way this is moving please keep posting lets really go to town