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[Post New]20/07/2007 17:57:31
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Holly Jahangiri

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It's TEXAS Haiku;
rain, rain, and more rain.
God must give a spit.
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[Post New]20/07/2007 20:15:02
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God must give a spit.
To water is beloved plants
and give us fruits for pleasure
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[Post New]20/07/2007 20:28:44
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Will have to change the last line from Ian's Haiku a bit to meet the number of required syllables.

Give fruits for pleasure
Please, as we pray from below -
Life can go forward.
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[Post New]20/07/2007 21:14:08
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Life can go forward,
Backing Death into reverse,
Bloodied, but unbowed.
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[Post New]21/07/2007 06:08:26
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Bloodied, but unbowed.
Steadfast we stand to
face the grim reaper
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[Post New]21/07/2007 06:36:07
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Face the grim reaper?
I would rather not today -
I want time to play.
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[Post New]21/07/2007 06:41:28
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I want time to play.
The game I love
The game of life
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[Post New]21/07/2007 07:31:49
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Ian, a suggestion,

for the second line, you need 7 syllables, something like
The game I will always love

For the first and third line, 5 syllables are needed in each, for example, the last line might be

The game I call life.

Just trying to help. I think that's bred in me since I taught for sooooooooo many years.
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[Post New]21/07/2007 09:21:59
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The game I call life
Can't be won or lost or tied
Just played, till the end.
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[Post New]21/07/2007 22:07:35
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Just played, till the end -
What if the end comes too soon?
Life's sometimes not fair.
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[Post New]22/07/2007 05:55:36
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President, 4RV Publishing LLC wrote:
Just played, till the end -
What if the end comes too soon?
Life's sometimes not fair. 


Life's sometimes not fair
Roughening toughening us a lot
Not giving what we deserve.
[Post New]22/07/2007 10:46:01
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Not giving what we deserve.
The things to make life more bearable
Justice peace equality and love
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[Post New]23/07/2007 16:04:31
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Hm. I think we're all wrong here.

Viv, I think what we're writing is closer to Senryu than Haiku.

Ian, both forms consist of 17 syllables in three unrhymed lines. The first line has 5 syllables, the second has 7 syllables, and the third has 5 syllables like the first.

See

http://members.optushome.com.au/kazoom/poetry/haiku.html
http://members.optushome.com.au/kazoom/poetry/senryu.html

It's the subject matter that distinguishes the two forms.

I could be terribly mean and start a sonnet chain...
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[Post New]23/07/2007 16:07:16
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Justice, Peace, and Love -
Equality's but a myth
Past birth's first moments.
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[Post New]23/07/2007 16:16:10
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Right I get it now while looking through I saw the diamonte now that looks Interesting as well an informative web site thank you for the link
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