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				<title>My first attempt at poetry :/</title>
				<description><![CDATA[  WARNING

This is my first attempt at poetry(or at least I havn't done it since 5th grade) and it may be very very bad. I am not responsible for anybody dying of laughter.

Thank you.


Oh, btw, I'm only 12 so don't give me TO hard of a time.



A great loss
By Erin Hill


As I kneel beside him
No one is making a sound
The lights in the hospital are dim
His heart beat is slowing down

The tears are coming out
As he lies there so still
He’s not moving, without a doubt
For so long he’s been ill

And we see he can’t hold on
But at least we will know
Though his life has been withdrawn
A better place he will go
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				<pubDate><![CDATA[Sun, 17 Aug 2008 17:20:14]]> GMT</pubDate>
				<author><![CDATA[ erin82much]]></author>
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				<title>Re:My first attempt at poetry :/</title>
				<description><![CDATA[ That was beautiful and so sad has this been an event in your life .

it is an excellent piece of work you must upload to a folder and then tag it poetry and it will be read by all the poetry community]]></description>
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				<pubDate><![CDATA[Mon, 18 Aug 2008 05:21:41]]> GMT</pubDate>
				<author><![CDATA[ Ian Paul]]></author>
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				<title>Re:My first attempt at poetry :/</title>
				<description><![CDATA[ aye. nice =D specially for a 12 year old. mad props. upload it. =D 
ur style o.O eh nvm.]]></description>
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				<pubDate><![CDATA[Mon, 18 Aug 2008 13:14:45]]> GMT</pubDate>
				<author><![CDATA[ q_stylez]]></author>
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				<title>Re:My first attempt at poetry :/</title>
				<description><![CDATA[ Well done Erin.
Excellent. Please write more poems.
I look forward to reading them. :-) 

Karen]]></description>
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				<pubDate><![CDATA[Tue, 19 Aug 2008 12:10:34]]> GMT</pubDate>
				<author><![CDATA[ Karen H-H]]></author>
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				<title>Re:My first attempt at poetry :/</title>
				<description><![CDATA[ it's expressive poem.thank u very much keep walking on this way.I wanna read more.]]></description>
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				<pubDate><![CDATA[Wed, 27 Aug 2008 10:20:25]]> GMT</pubDate>
				<author><![CDATA[ Mr.romanticist]]></author>
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